Sent to snowdrop, got no reply. Here for public for consumption, public ridicule, and to preserve the record:
snowdrop helped santa at work, so this little elf didn't have time nor the eyes to see that you actually sent an attachment with your mail
I blame Thunderbird for it's last (in more than one sense) update that probably wasn't even related
The only problem I really have with this is that it doesn't seem to allow for the potential of "bad guys" in their ranks. My personal philosophy in terms of writing stuff for this project is that all the factions have good and bad within them. Nobody's really a "poor misunderstood hero" throughout, and even the best factions might have darker elements.
I think that topic - "bad vs good guys" - is interesting and brings forth a problem most stories have: They are usually biased, and they are also told from somebody's perspective, and in casual fantasy it is usually a very black or white world: Either you're good, or evil The nuances are seldom there to be captured, and to do so requires much more lore, story, reading, playing etc. It is always easier to just show every struggle as good vs bad, underdog vs system, or whatever, than to start painting a picture of anti-heroes and reality that's more complex.
Given it was written in POV-form I think it makes sense it doesn't give much room for "we're bad". I mean, who on earth would ever think that about him/herself? Most wouldn't, and those that would are probably "good"
Heck, even Hitler assumed that what he did was good for humanity and the world at large - he wouldn't ever have called himself a "bad guy". The bad guys were "just" the rest of the world
about the story
None of the others are in POV, so I'm not sure Shadowguilds should be either. Furthermore shadowguild should change name to something less misleading if we're to run with the fantasy-jews/witches/immigrants-theme, so we'll do that.
I really did like the POV though and think half of it was really nice. I imagine we could have some shorter story of a couple of pages written like that where we maybe get to follow a common girl, her semi-poor family, her relationship with some lover and how they somehow fall victims of something, all ending very badly and just hinting that a great migration is coming... Would be cool to follow it from a normal, totally unimportant persons, pov, and to introduce the hardships they will have to deal with as a summed up representation for what the "SG" will endure soon enough...